Sunday, October 08, 2006

Concerning Haiku

today's post is rather different from most, as I would like all comments to be posted as Haiku - for the culturally challenged, haiku is a form of Japanese poetry that has a specific rhythmic pattern (google it). For purposes of uniformity, I have decided that we will stick to the common five syllable, seven syllable, five syllable meter.
Here's the piece that inspired me
We thrash, curse for air
As our strangler declares, look
How violent the Arab
Zein El-Amine
While I can only hope to some day achieve the poignancy of the above poem, for now, here are some of my own - Hmm - a few on Ramadaan, and a few on life. Enjoy

Aphrodisiac
Which we break fast with daily
Nafs, hard to control

Shoulder to shoulder
Please switch off cellular phones
Allahu Akbar

Chaos, cruelty
Men Fighting for survival
Free Palestine Now

caramel goodness
Also cleans stains from toilet
Life does tastes good, coke

Procrastination
Boredom, and insomnia
Solution, MXIT

30 comments:

  1. on second thought - my initial blog filter was a bit rigid - so you can leav a normal comment as long as you have a Haiku accompanying it.

    blogging, waste of time
    cuts down time for ibadaat
    Hell fire awaits me

    :)

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  2. The boy drew buildings
    He drew no pictures for her
    Sad girl stands alone

    ok it's lame, but it's a start...

    Shoulder to shoulder's cool, captures so much in 17 syllables.
    Also liked the haiku on Coke...:)

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  3. laughter and applause-
    the people love her so much
    the star of the show

    hehe, now that's my kinda haiku...;)

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  4. my silver sunshine
    he dances in my twilight
    wake me tomorrow

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  5. the boy drew buildings
    his profound stupidity
    sad girl finds love
    :)

    orange boy in shop
    hiding under the table
    in a green turban :)

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  6. wai are yu hai ding
    i am miss ing yu so much
    wen will i see you

    i cant stop blogging
    i need to go to rehab
    dude its all you fault

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  7. i mean. 'your'
    and joe, i miss you. visit my blog

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  8. Again, this is why you people are my bestest best friends...:)
    Q, I love your orange boy in shop haiku!!!!Can't stop laughing, and it's hard to laugh on an empty stomach...ooh also liked your take on my one ;) oh and your rehab one, lol.
    MJ you crazy mofo:) love you guys, sniff...

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  9. searching for something
    its there, just need to find it
    in my crazy mind


    gosh! this is pathetic! havnt written a haiku since , hmm... primary school..nah! mayb high school. so forgive the lame attempt

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  10. he asks she declines
    she drowns in shallow water
    he floats in limbo

    junaid-pls disable word identification. its annoyin!

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  11. internet addict
    staring mindlessly at screen
    achieving nothing

    cant rem who said- this is addictive. like pringles- once u pop u cant stop

    where did the time go?was meant to write article-deadline tmrw, instead i found myself watching youtube, checking forums, listening to altrnative nasheeds & chatting to my sis in UK. & penning lame haikus

    ciao

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  12. Ok BB - yeah . it is annoying - security measures like this are as helpful as having your goldfish watch over your car.

    I like your second haiku - first one wasnt that bad ;p

    nomad in sand land
    finding it hard to turn back
    to a place called home

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  13. Leave, thoughts untouched
    Shelter within the heart
    love denies me

    ---lame so lame---
    but thats me hehe o n da fact dat i'm a bit down---
    come save me dear friend from myself!!!

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  14. No happy thoughts lie within me now mwah

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  15. in cool defiance
    she lowers her veil gently
    her eyes define her

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  16. cold pain within him
    nurturing his desire
    die for your freedom

    junaid, look what you've started! i had haikus running thru my head all night but i seem to have forgotten them. & they were good. i do say so myself! oh well. genius is often a result of insomnia

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  17. nomad in sand land
    embracing home in her dreams
    await my presence

    nomad in sand land
    dreading impending shackles
    of walls and alarms


    nomad in sand land
    living independently
    in complete safety

    nomad in sand land
    craving tarkari and rice
    and a lekker braai

    ok, ok, im stopping!bad bb, no more haiku for u (",)

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  18. we are all losers
    need boyfriends/girlfriends/a life
    live not for this blog.

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  19. I Came, thought
    you'd be here, left
    Unanswered Alone

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  20. well. this piece is for my dear friend - i love fighting with you probably as much as you love washing dishes

    King Soloman said
    love the finer things in life
    but dont miss prayer

    It matters not if
    the Herd was silenced that day
    the essence not lost

    umbeleleko uluse - (thats Bembe btw)

    sweet and gorgeous jo
    resting in my heart always
    here lies dramaqueen

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  21. some haiku thoughts while on the plane to Kimberly:


    To Kimberly I
    fly in a sardine's tin can,
    holes and diamonds don't.
    --

    E-mail aquaintances
    on mxit evolved thumbs tap
    missives of misses.
    --

    yes, i like that guy,
    like you like that other girl
    weird how we choose them.
    --

    haiku sucks like a
    bad ho, too quick syllable,
    i love you short time.
    --


    er yeah, some of them are downright weird, bad and unsavoury. lets just say fasting and high altitudes do not a good mix make.

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  22. empty, growling pit
    till sunset heralds, craving
    sweet apple lagan

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  23. MJAD Stands for this:
    mahomed Junaid Adores:
    hmmm. its a secret...

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  24. whats the point of having secrets if everyones gonna know about it :( i need a new secret now - something big - like the coke formula - although i'd probably end up telling you about it QD :P

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  25. stupid MJ Khan,
    silly girl, facade wears thin
    stuck in the present

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  26. paddling without oar
    hope, discarded in water
    was hard, letting go

    lips trailing, flashes
    flesh tingling, shut out the light
    lost in the moment

    typing yuck schedule
    damn stupid comittee work
    i yearn for my bed

    venom in your words
    i'm feeling used, thrown away
    gold chocolate coin

    can you love a friend
    when you cannot define, friend
    nay, i am deceived

    distant smile, questions
    rebound, recluse or regret
    surely Allah Knows Best

    I'm walking away
    cant bear to look back at you
    love, an illusion


    huge cockroach scuttling
    foot snuffs chance of family
    Allah we return

    too young to be hurt
    too smart, too witty, too dumb
    too stubborn, too blind

    jack and Jill went up
    to fetch a pail of water
    tripped, clumsy bastard!

    these haiku's are sad
    mj is pretty sleepy
    look at time of post

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  27. too many comments
    get tired of reading them
    but still i visit

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  28. mj dear mj
    friendship's a good thing, you know
    grab it with both hands :)

    mj dear mj
    a sweet, mood-enhancing drug
    on which we're all high :)

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